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Every year the Spring Festival is my most happy day, every family hangs red lanterns, antithetical couplet, children put on new clothes, we sit together to eat the family reunion dinner, the most happy thing is with fireworks.

I was six years old that year, the Spring Festival after eating the reunion dinner, my brother and I quickly ran into the yard with fireworks, I carefully use lighter to lead a touch, and my brother and I ran to see the fireworks empty and take off on the sky like a bunch of chrysanthemum and our fireworks burst, some like a gyroscope, hovering on the ground; Some like split, in the air and the colorful "flowers"; There is like heaven meteor, flashed in the sky... Beautiful!

If every day can be like the Spring Festival, that it would be good!

Teacher's comment: this article hierarchy clear, full sentences. Full text is filled with passion, can realize you read between the lines of the affection of the Spring Festival and longing for a better life. At the same time I also wish you happiness, happy forever!

每年过春节是我最开心的日子，家家户户挂上红红的灯笼，贴上对联，小孩子穿上新衣、大家坐在一起吃团圆饭，最开心的事是放烟花。

我六岁那年春节，吃完团圆饭后，我和弟弟飞快的跑到院子里放烟花，我小心翼翼地用打火机往引线上一碰，我和弟弟就跑，只见烟花空而起飞上天空像一簇菊花，我们的烟花一朵朵炸开，有的好像陀螺一样，在地上转来转去;有的仿佛天女散花似的，在空中撒出五彩的“花朵”;还有的有如天外流星一般，在空中飞驰而过……美丽极了!

如果每天多可以像过春节一样那该多好啊!

教师评语：这篇文章层次清晰，语句流畅。全文充满了激情，从字里行间能体会到你对春节的喜爱之情和对美好生活的向往。同时我也希望你永远幸福、快乐!